vox nihili

Haha, yeah I actually wrote it in response to Safe and Sound. I heard that one, and I loved it, but I felt like it was missing a darker component ...

Thanks, Butterfly...I totally missed that "you tell you" XD Yeah, I'm trying to set it to music, but for some reason or another, it's much easier to write in words ...

Stella- It's just changes some. I'm not sure if it's what could be called a linear sort of pattern, but it's going. Things are going to happen...just as well that ...

Thanks for the review! On them falling in love; my goal in this chapter is to show that she's begrudgingly biding her time, as he's her only means of survival, ...

While the metric system is indeed distinctly more useful, as several people have pointed out, it would be an immense pain where the sun don't shine. On the point of ...

Review Part Eight! Again I like this chapter better than the earlier ones. I think you may be better at writing drama rather than action. This one was quite nice ...

I cut out the creepy part...you're right, it was creepy. As for her speech, I could use a little help. What sort of thing would pull you in?

First off, let's get the nitpicks out of the way: The boy looked mildly disappointed, his ridiculously baggy cap sagging over one eye as he withdrew his head from the ...

Thanks for the edit. I must admit, speech tags are my bane. I'll have to go through and re-work the point-of-view thing, which as you pointed out is choppy. This ...

I officially feel silly now. Spelling and me, well, I need to be better friends with the spellcheck, you're absoiutely right. I"m not sure how precisely I managed to convince ...

I know the rhyme is heavily embeded in the poem, but I love the gentle rhyme when it goes ABCA.... it's so pretty.

I made a few of the changes you had all suggested. Thanks!

I haven't read the other parts, so if I point out something that makes sense in the context of the novel, don't mind me. XD He made his way up ...

Thanks, Andy. I've gone back through and edited some of the areas that you commented on. I also cut out that sub-plot about Gerra...Looking at where I want my story ...

thanks, everybody who posted! I've been working on this one lately (Yeah, it's been a year since I posted it here...) and it's shaping up nicely. The characters have continued ...